Story Updates

Julie went over the script tonight and started coming up with some great ideas on how to make the short version of the story feel more cohesive. We talked about a few of the ideas and I think they will make the story much stronger. None of the ideas make the story longer (actually, in some cases they make it shorter) but instead are just different ways of going about the scenes. The main scenes are unaffected like the beginning and the Carmen / Peter fight. These changes are more focused on the in between scenes. I will bring in the updated script next week.